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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in the other countries.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in the other countries.
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The supplied Bar chart Illustrates data about the difficulties facing people when they go to live in the other countries A glance at the graph reveals the most challenging age in making
friends
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 are 18 to 34,
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 over 55 are lesser than that. Looking at the information for more details in 18 to 35, learning the local language is the easiest as it shows 29%, and finding a place to live 40%, send 46% for making
friends
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.
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, middle age 35 to 55 are dealing with less difficulty making
friends
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to
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apply
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36% And 3% plus that for finding a place
for
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apply
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, and
then
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 35% for Learning the local language. For those older than 55, the most complex challenge is learning a language 54%
then
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 23% for making
friends
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 find 2 22% for finding a place to live

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words friends with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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