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Write a letter to a colleague who gave you a book that helped you for presentation at work. Describe the presentation Why was it important? How did it help you?

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Dear Sam, Hope you are doing well. I am reaching out to thank you for lending me your book for my
presnetation
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presentation
 in the office yesterday. The topic of 'Cybersecurity program for banks' is a trending subject that needed to
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 well by the people within my organization. The event was
successfull
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, and I
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highly appreciated for
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explanation
 on the matter. The book you shared on
evolution
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 of cybersecurity was very helpful in shaping the content of the presentation. Since the topic was new and I did not have access to the internet,
therefore
, it was a key source of information available to me. The book was
also
 very helpful in gaining knowledge and perspective on the subject of cybersecurity. It had very simplified
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 and
also
 cited relevant examples from the industry, which enabled me to share a fresh point of view with the audience. Again, I would like to thank you for helping me in need. See you soon in the office. Apoorva
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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