Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

In today's globalized, urbanized, and over-populated world, sharing
personal
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opinion
on debatable
issues
are becoming more and more ordinary, especially
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popular individuals, who work in film. In my
opinion
,
this
is a positive development and
reasons
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for it
articulated
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in the following paragraphs. To being with, celebrities have
a
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gigantic stardom which
influence
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to
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a great
amount
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of
people
.
Therefore
,
people
try to follow their favourite ones by doing whatever they say. So that, whenever any crucial public
issue
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encouragement or need to be spread for awareness, those film stars are giving their views on that and it
become
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popular among pupil and everyone now focus on that
issue
.
For instance
, whenever the government want to emphasize any public
issue
such
as global warming, deforestation, e-waste and so on, it gave that task to celebrities for spreading awareness because citizens
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convinced by them. Another notable reason is, when celebrities provided their
opinion
on general
issues
, They
also
try to be positive as
much
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they can because they do not want to give
negative
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the negative
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aspect
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of those
issues
as
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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can blindly follow their
opinion
and react immediately.
Due to
that,
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complex
issues
like religion, caste, and race could have
great
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impact on everybody and if they give negative views on
those
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issue
, it can be converted into
worst
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situation
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situations
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among different
religion
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religions
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and caste
people
. To cite an example, film stars always give
positive
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view
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views
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on any stance situation of religion or caste.
This
is why they always try to be positive for spreading harmony in society. In conclusion, Stars have gained a lot of popularity
in
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their throughout careers and they have a great influence on
people
. So they help with their positive view on public
issues
and they
also
try to make
peaceful
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society.
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