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Some people believe that the best way to succeed in life is to get higher education/a university degree, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #life #education #university
There is a heated debate among
people
 about whether to pursue higher
education
 in order to succeed in
life
 later on. I personally believe that
university
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a university
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education
 is an important initial step towards
successful
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a successful
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life
. On the one hand, it is undeniable that not all successful
people
 have a
university
background
 or degree certificate.
This
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These
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people
 often rely on
their
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 experience and practical skills they accumulated during their lifetime, and they ignore the importance of higher
education
 in
people
’s lives. Having higher educational
background
 does not mean
people
 accomplish all of their goals in
life
.
Moreover
, living in a digital era, sometimes
people
 do not feel
necessity
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 for higher
education
, as they can gain knowledge from experts in any field with the help of
internet
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the internet
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. Considering its affordability and accessibility,
internet
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the internet
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 made it easier for
people
 to obtain valuable skills at a negligible cost in every corner of the world.
This
, in turn,
undervalue
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 the significance of
university
education
 in the lives of successful
people
.
On the other hand
, I side with supporters of effective higher
education
 to lead
prosperous
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a prosperous
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
University
 provides learners with comprehensive
education
 given by professional teachers and professors and
create
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creates
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better
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a better
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 learning environment. If students apply to prestigious academies, learners not only enhance their expertise in
specialized
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a specialized
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area
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areas
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, but
also
 they can develop
an
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apply
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essential
skillset
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skill set
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,
such
 as leadership skills, time management,
collaboration
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and collaboration
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, which will inevitably benefit them throughout their lives.
Moreover
, another benefit of
university
education
 is it teaches students to be competitive in their professional
life
,
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apply
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 and encourages them to strive for success later on.
This
 means that as young workers enter
competitive
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the competitive
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 job market, they try hard to stand out from other workers and,
as a result
, make
positive
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a positive
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contribution
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contributions
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 to society.
These
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 mean that
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
 achieve a prosperous
life
,
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 if they have
better
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a better
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 academic
background
. In conclusion,
although
 sometimes it is possible to lead a successful
life
 without having a
university
education
, I agree with those who argue that the better
educational
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background
 is, the higher
chances
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your chances
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 of succeeding in
life
 would be.
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