Some people believe that the best way to succeed in life is to get higher education/a university degree, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a heated debate among
people
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about whether to pursue higher
education
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in order to succeed in
life
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later on. I personally believe that
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university
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education
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is an important initial step towards
successful
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a successful
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life
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. On the one hand, it is undeniable that not all successful
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have a
university
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background
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or degree certificate.
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people
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often rely on
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experience and practical skills they accumulated during their lifetime, and they ignore the importance of higher
education
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in
people
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’s lives. Having higher educational
background
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does not mean
people
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accomplish all of their goals in
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.
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, living in a digital era, sometimes
people
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do not feel
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for higher
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, as they can gain knowledge from experts in any field with the help of
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the internet
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. Considering its affordability and accessibility,
internet
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the internet
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made it easier for
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to obtain valuable skills at a negligible cost in every corner of the world.
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, in turn,
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the significance of
university
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education
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in the lives of successful
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.
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, I side with supporters of effective higher
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to lead
prosperous
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
University
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provides learners with comprehensive
education
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given by professional teachers and professors and
create
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better
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a better
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learning environment. If students apply to prestigious academies, learners not only enhance their expertise in
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a specialized
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area
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, but
also
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they can develop
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essential
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skill set
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,
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as leadership skills, time management,
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and collaboration
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, which will inevitably benefit them throughout their lives.
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, another benefit of
university
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education
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is it teaches students to be competitive in their professional
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and encourages them to strive for success later on.
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means that as young workers enter
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the competitive
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job market, they try hard to stand out from other workers and,
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, make
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a positive
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contribution
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contributions
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to society.
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mean that
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the majority
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of
people
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achieve a prosperous
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,
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if they have
better
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a better
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academic
background
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. In conclusion,
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sometimes it is possible to lead a successful
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without having a
university
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education
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, I agree with those who argue that the better
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the educational
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background
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is, the higher
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your chances
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of succeeding in
life
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would be.
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