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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate how a
university’s
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sports
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centre
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 looks now and how it is planned to be developed.
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, there will be expansive enlargements with
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 to the construction of buildings and the addition of facilities. In terms of the
university’s
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sports
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centre
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 now, there is a main entrance to the south of the
university’s
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sports
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centre
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 where the reception is located. In the
centre
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 of the
university’s
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sports
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centre
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, there is a 25-metre pool and it is surrounded by the seating in the east, the changing room in the
west
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, and the gym in the north. There are
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two
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 outdoor courts, which are situated to the
west
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 and east of the
university’s
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sports
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centre
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. There are plans to extend the
university’s
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sports
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centre
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.
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, the gym will be enlarged to the east and the
two
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 outdoor courts will be replaced by the
sports
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 hall in the east and the leisure pool in the
west
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.
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, the
two
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 dance studios will be built in the east part of the building.
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,
two
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 changing rooms will be constructed in the northeast and in the southwest.
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, in terms of the main entrance, a cafe will be constructed,
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 a
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 shop will be added in the
west
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