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Many people believe that educational standards have decliend in recent times, particularly int he areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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One might have expected that in the modern era, educational
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 absolute best.
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, the reality is quite the opposite of
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 issue is specifically observed in the fields of literature and mathematics. In
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 the decline and provide some solutions to overcome it. The primary reason for
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 in the standard of education in the areas of literacy and numeracy is being
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. The curriculum is devised to score perfect numbers in exams rather
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 focusing on learning and skill development in the pupils.
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 outcomes in terms of test grades
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 but will fail to nourish
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 of the students.
For instance
, students are provided essay topics for preparation prior to the exam. They have the option to search for relevant essays online and memorize them.
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educational institutions should devise the course structure in a way that boosts the creative and learning side of the children. The tests taken should focus on analyzing the pupil's concepts
instead
 of their memory.
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, the students should be trained on the basics of maths problem solving
instead
 of giving them pre-solved questions.
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 future,
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 improving the standard of education. To recapitulate, it is evident from the examples provided that the standard of education is going down the hill, but with careful and planned measures, it can be brought back on track.
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task response
Expand on the reasons for the decline in educational standards in literacy and numeracy, and provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear and cohesive structure throughout the essay. Connect ideas more smoothly between paragraphs to improve overall coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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