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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some people think some professional careers should
work
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country
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which
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in which
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 they have trained,
others
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while others
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 think that they should be unrestricted to have a job in another
country
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. I would argue that every professional worker
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 to be free to select some
country
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 for
work
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 and would show discuss both views. A person who graduated from university,
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use many resources during their education in that
country
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,
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and they
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 should return them back by working in the same
country
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 to serve a service.
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, a patient who lives in a
country
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 and gets some disease should reach the public health aspect from a doctor who graduated from that
country
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 sufficiency.
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, I would show another aspect of these.
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, someone should be able to pick up the
work
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 in any
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 which they want.
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, an engineer should get the
opportunities
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 to
work
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 at a high-paid salary which
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 for their life.
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 to somebody who came from
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 poor nation and get a scholarship to study in a developed
country
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, they should provide their knowledge to their citizen to improve their own
country
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. In conclusion,
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although
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the
country
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 in which professional workers have been trained or graduated should receive their resources returned during the worker's study or training. I would argue that the workers should get opportunities to choose another
country
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 for do the job because they should get
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 salary or go to develop their home city.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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