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TASK-2 Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Few parents offer
wide
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 range of
toys
 for their
kids
 to spend time with. In my, view it is not a good idea to provide a variety of things for playing as it might ruin a
child
's brain development and focus.
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Firstly
 a
child
's brain growth will be good during the early stage of
thier
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their
 life ,
upto
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up to
 the age
if
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of
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 5 years. When you provide
huge
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a huge
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amount
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 of
toys
kids
 will be habituated
with
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to
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 those
toys
 and may not concentrate on other regular activities that the
child
 has to focus on.
For instance
, my niece was given different types of
toys
where
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 he was playing with
those
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them
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 and he couldn't focus on most of the things
such
 as food
,
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while
 eating he just eats but he doesn't know what he was eating and whenever I visit his home he just had a glance sight later ignores the person.
Secondly
, few parents offer costly and
high standard
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toys
 where they want to portray their social image towards others in
the
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society.
However
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 it is a bad idea.
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, when they
have
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a
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visit
to
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their friends or family
kids
 just play with those
toys
 and become inactive among other
kids
. As we are in a
relation oriented
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 society we should make
kids
to
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adopt
this
 culture as it would help to live in a better society. In a nutshell, it would be great if the parents concentrate on a
child
's mental condition
instead
 of spending more time
to provide
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huge
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a huge
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 number of
toys
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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