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Any country should be able to sell goods to other countries without the restrictions of the government. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's society, there is a growing debate about whether sellers could sell their commodities to other
nations
 without any restrictions from authorities. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
 viewpoint because of some drawbacks that it could bring since governments have a robust influence on the trade market. First and foremost, the independence of trading between many
countries
 could lead to the underdevelopment of local businesses. In many
nations
, especially in developing
countries
, many
products
 depend on the supply of other
nations
,
otherwise
, they do not have enough resources to develop their own goods.
Thus
, these
countries
' demands may base on the supply of other
nations
, and the governments could not control the price and quantity of commodities.
For example
, by virtue of the dependence on coffee quantity from abroad
countries
, the price of coffee in Laos increased by 200% in a 5-year period from 1995 to 2000.
Secondly
, the freedom of trading could decrease the income from
taxes
 of many
nations
. With the development of technology and transportation, the logistics industry is developing to become one of the highest
income
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 in many
countries
.
Moreover
,
taxes
 in
this
 field could support many local companies to compete with global ones in market share and
products
. Technical machines could be an obvious example, to rise the supply of
products
 in Vietnam, the government raise funds for local technological corporations and reduce the
taxes
 they have to pay. To balance the supply and the demand in a nation, the government need to pay more attention to local companies to bring suitable
products
 to customers. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
this
 proposal is a negative development for every
countries
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 because of the underdevelopment of local businesses and a decrease in the income of
taxes
.
Therefore
, it is advisable that governments should impose restrictive control on the import and export of global goods.
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