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Do you agree to Nelson Mandela’s quote (education is the most powerful weapon for changing the world)

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“Education is the most powerful weapon for changing the
world
”. The quote that has been mentioned by the legend, Nelson Mandela is quite agreeable to making the
world
 a better place. In
this
 essay, we can see why it is not the only factor needed,
while
 other factors
such
 as love needed to change the
world
. On the first hand, edification is the most important tool for enlightening the
world
. Without proper instructions, many nations would suffer from un-proper leaders and workers to progress to success.
For instance
, in recent attempts, after corona pandemic, many developed and developing countries face an economic crisis, because of wrong decisions from the leaders.
Furthermore
, teaching from a younger age to be a self-independent civilian with generous, social habits.
For example
, most schools teach children to follow their ambition of being independent workers by mentioning other lessons
such
 as caring and helping each other with cleaning the environment around you.
On the other hand
, not only education is the righteous solution to the
world
 a better place. The love between nations and their people should be essential as well it tends to stop racism
plus
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and
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 criticism which tends to arrange war or genocide.
For example
, the long-lasting war between Israel and Palestine.
Also
, the recently started war between Russia and Ukraine.
In
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Conversely
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conversely
, education will be the first and foremost idea to change the
world
 and make it a better place. Despite that, love is
also
 needed in order to gain peace over other nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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