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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, in the digital era, advanced technology provides
people
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 with the opportunity to be in contact with each other everywhere.
Although
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 pros, there are cons
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 as alienation from the real world and relocating to virtual reality,
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 appearing the unsocial behaviour. On the one hand, the
Internet
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 is a great thing, without which it is difficult to imagine the modern world now. Through the
internet
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, it is possible to communicate with other
people
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 all over the world. It helps to stay connected with members of a family or make some new
friends
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 in other countries.
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,
people
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 from Spain are able to have
friends
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 in Colombia, without ever having been to Colombia.
On the other hand
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, because of the
internet
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, currently, no need to communicate with real
people
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, and no need to leave the house for something. The most of necessities are possible to do online.
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, the needs for social communication are
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 satisfied online.
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,
people
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 have an opportunity to order food or speak with
friends
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 using social media and it is possible to get online different services
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 as government services, doctor appointments, or make shopping.
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, despite all benefits of the
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such
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 as convenient modern online services, or abilities to communicate with different
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, I strongly believe that it is needed to keep a balance between real life and virtual life. It is necessary to keep up with the times, but
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 it is necessary to have live contact with family and
friends
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.
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