Public services are also significant and shouldn't be overlooked. I would suggest that the revenue generated can further be used to invest in public facilities.

Government funding is the most paramount factor in running a
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towards development,
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to say ,that it should be spent on public services only is wrong.
Art
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and theatre can preserve the culture of a
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that the budget allocated to those is a waste of money and I will explain why in
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and music can be elements to depict culture in a nation.It is
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vital that a portion of the state's investment should be reserved for these recreational facilities,
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they are critical for education as well.example can be seen in developed countries
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as France, where they allocated a considerable amount of money to renovate the theatre and cultural centres.
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help with the
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's economy. Proper investments will lead to an increase in the quality and quantity of
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sites, like museums, which will gradually attract tourists.
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, tourism will blossom and will
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boost the economy and prove beneficial to the government.
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that
art
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and music and other activities are essential to state progress.Public services are
also
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significant and shouldn't be overlooked. I would suggest that the revenue generated can
further
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be used to invest in public facilities.

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