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Pets should to be treated as family members.Do you agree or disagree?

#pets #members
Interests
for
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pets
 differs from
people
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 to
people
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,
however
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pets
 are taking
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important position in a lot of
people
’s life. Looking back to
long
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the long
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 history of evolution humans started domesticating wild animals, through
long
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 process . Some of them
where
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 used as
a
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livestock others for transportation and
pets
 as friends and safety. From
the
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inception
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inception,
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 they were close
for
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 humans being always beside them and helping
in protecting
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livestock from wild animals, hunting and gathering. The dogs were the earliest ones in the adaptation of new style. Nowadays there are several variations of
pets
. Even though the most acquired ones are dogs and cats. They are
good
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 companion for
people
. From my own
experience
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experience,
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 I used to have a kitty when I was a child. It is like we have grown up together. Apparently, almost all of my childhood memories are related
with
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 my kitty.
Moreover
, she taught me from
my
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young
ages
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 how
treat
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 carefully others and animals.
Besides
pets
 are valuable companions, they are loyal helpers of
people
. It is not that rare to meet up with invalid
people
 on the street or
people
 who are disabled to take orientation by themselves( blind )with helpful dogs
besides
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 them.
Furthermore
, in places like Japan or
others
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 highly vulnerable areas for
earthquake
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people
 usually keep aquariums with fish at home. They utilize their ability of sensation long before the event takes place. Regardless of
pets
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pet
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 operations they
are become
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become
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crucial
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a crucial
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 part of our
life
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lives
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 with their ability to be close to us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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