Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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convenience
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dangerous
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activity
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different
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kinds
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energatic
after their dance practice performance, or they can Correct your spelling
energetic
choose
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with their friends and cousins Correct your spelling
outside
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free
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their
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their mood
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