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Band 6

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in piblic services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that
authority
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 should spend
money
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 on public sectors
such
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 as developing hospitals , schools, security and so on
instead
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 of recreational activities
such
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 as art and
music
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. I completely agree with the idea that
administration
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the administration
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 should focus on the
people
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 and
country
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's development
sides
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 rather than
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music
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the music
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 and theatre
sides
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. There are a number of reasons why I believe government should waste
money
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 on education, hospital and other supporting
sides
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.
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 with, it will help
underdeveloped
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the underdeveloped
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country
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countries
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 turn into
developed
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the developed
a developed
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country
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countries
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 because
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the well
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well educated
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nation
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 can boost the
country
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's prosperity.
A
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 educated person knows
the
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apply
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what will
good
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 for
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the country
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country
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 economy and
then
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 they will work for it.
Moreover
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, in
future
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,future
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 they will represent their native
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country
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country's
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 good things all over the world which will create attraction outsider
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country
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countries
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 to invest
money
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on
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in
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 their
country
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.
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, In
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Bangladesh
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bangladesh
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,bangladesh
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 most of the students participate international
programme
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programmes
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 to represent
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bangladesh
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Bangladesh
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 globally and
also
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 inform them about their
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country
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country's
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resource
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resources
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.
On the other hand
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,
school
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schools
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,
college
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colleges
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 and
hospital
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hospitals
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these
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apply
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are the best sector for getting international currency. If we inaugurate those
sides
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 and get famous ,
then
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 international
student
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students
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 or
people
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 will come
that
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to that
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country
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 for their education, treatment or other activities.
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, India is famous for
well
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 treatment
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that
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which
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 is why every year various types of
people
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 come
in
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to
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 India from various countries for health
cure
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cures
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 and
then
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 they get most of
international
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the international
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 currency from
hospital
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the hospital
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 sector which is helped to progress their
country
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.
However
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, if we invest
on
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in
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 art most of the students will get interested
on
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in
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music
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,
arts
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and arts
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 than engineering,
doctor
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and doctor
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 sectors.
As a result
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, we have to take help from outsider
people
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 for
job
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jobs
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, education and
others
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other
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 side.
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,
the
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apply
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Daily
Start
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Star
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 published that 60%
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of student
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student
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students
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 in
Bangladesh
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 go to
the
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apply
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Australian
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Australia
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 or
American
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 for undergraduate which is not good for
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country's
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the country's
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 development because
Bangladesh
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have
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 to
be
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apply
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face
lack
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a lack
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 of intellectual
person
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people
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. Whatever, public service development will help to remove unemployment. As most
of
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the
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apply
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people
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 can easily get
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 in
those sector
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that sector
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, they will
fulfill
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fulfil
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 family
demand
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demands
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 and lead
luxurious
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a luxurious
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 life. In conclusion, considering the factors about. I believe, if government focus on public services and
spend
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spends
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their
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its
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money
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 on these sectors,
they
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it
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 will get a breathtaking achievement .
Student
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The student
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 should spend their time on arts and
music
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 as
a
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apply
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leisure
activities
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activity
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.

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Word Count

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