Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in piblic services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is argued that
authority
should spend Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
money
on public sectors such
as developing hospitals , schools, security and so on instead
of recreational activities such
as art and music
. I completely agree with the idea that administration
should focus on the Correct article usage
the administration
people
and country
's development sides
rather than music
and theatre Correct article usage
the music
sides
.
There are a number of reasons why I believe government should waste money
on education, hospital and other supporting sides
. To begin
with, it will help underdeveloped
Add an article
the underdeveloped
country
turn into Fix the agreement mistake
countries
developed
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the developed
a developed
country
because Fix the agreement mistake
countries
Add an article
the well
a well
well educated
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well-educated
nation
can boost the Fix the agreement mistake
nations
country
's prosperity. A
educated person knows Change the article
An
the
what will Correct article usage
apply
good
for Add a missing verb
be good
Add an article
the country
country
economy and Change noun form
country's
then
they will work for it. Moreover
, in future
they will represent their native Add a comma
,future
country
good things all over the world which will create attraction outsider Change noun form
country's
country
to invest Fix the agreement mistake
countries
money
on
their Change preposition
in
country
. For example
, In Change the capitalization
Bangladesh
bangladesh
most of the students participate international Add a comma
,bangladesh
programme
to represent Fix the agreement mistake
programmes
bangladesh
globally and Change the capitalization
Bangladesh
also
inform them about their country
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country's
resource
. Fix the agreement mistake
resources
On the other hand
, school
,Fix the agreement mistake
schools
college
and Fix the agreement mistake
colleges
hospital
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hospitals
these
are the best sector for getting international currency. If we inaugurate those Correct pronoun usage
apply
sides
and get famous , then
international student
or Fix the agreement mistake
students
people
will come that
Change preposition
to that
country
for their education, treatment or other activities. For instance
, India is famous for well
treatment Change the adverb
good
that
is why every year various types of Correct pronoun usage
which
people
come in
India from various countries for health Change preposition
to
cure
and Fix the agreement mistake
cures
then
they get most of international
currency from Add an article
the international
hospital
sector which is helped to progress their Correct article usage
the hospital
country
.
However
, if we invest on
art most of the students will get interested Change preposition
in
on
Change preposition
in
music
, arts
than engineering, Correct word choice
and arts
doctor
sectors. Correct word choice
and doctor
As a result
, we have to take help from outsider people
for job
, education and Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
others
side. Correct quantifier usage
other
For example
, the
Daily Correct article usage
apply
Start
published that 60% Correct your spelling
Star
Change preposition
of student
student
in Fix the agreement mistake
students
Bangladesh
go to the
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apply
Australian
or Correct your spelling
Australia
American
for undergraduate which is not good for Replace the word
America
country's
development because Correct article usage
the country's
Bangladesh
have
to Change the verb form
has
be
face Unnecessary verb
apply
lack
of intellectual Correct article usage
a lack
person
. Whatever, public service development will help to remove unemployment. As most Fix the agreement mistake
people
of
Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
people
can easily get Add an article
a job
job
in Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
those sector
, they will Change the determiner
that sector
those sectors
fulfill
family Change the spelling
fulfil
demand
and lead Fix the agreement mistake
demands
luxurious
life.
In conclusion, considering the factors about. I believe, if government focus on public services and Add an article
a luxurious
spend
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spends
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
money
on these sectors, they
will get a breathtaking achievement . Correct pronoun usage
it
Student
should spend their time on arts and Add an article
The student
A student
music
as a
leisure Correct article usage
apply
activities
.Correct the article-noun agreement
activity
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