The first below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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is used in a typical Australian household, the
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the
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emissions
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derive from
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consumed in an Australian household greenhouse.
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charts are considered the
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use and the
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emissions related to six categories which are: heating,
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heating, refrigeration, cooling, lighting and other appliances. In the first
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a significant majority is represented by the sum between
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heating and heating which represent 72%.
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used for cooling with only 2%. The third thing more
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consuming are other appliances with 15%.
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in the second pie chart, the sum between heating and
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heating
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the most important
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emission source but, in
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case, the percentage for
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heating is greater than the percentage for heating.
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emissions for other appliances represent the second source compared to the first graph
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is the third. In both, the smallest value, for the
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use and for the
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emission, is for cooling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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