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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.
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The provided line graph illustrates the
number
 of males and females reading
books
 from the school library.
Overall
, despite the
number
 of girls reading
books
 being greater in 2009, by the end of the given
period
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 the
number
 of
boys
 reached the peak point. The
number
 of
boys
 taking
books
 from the school library in 2009 was about 25
books
,
while
 the
number
 of girls in the same year was almost 50
books
. In 2011 the
number
 of
books
 taken by males was almost the same as the
number
 of
books
 taken by females which equalled approximately 100 pieces of writing.
Although
 the
number
 of
books
 taken by girls and
boys
 in 2011 was exactly the same, right after that the
number
 of
books
 taken by
boys
 rapidly increased to the
number
 of 140
books
.
Moreover
, in the same ,year the
number
 of
books
 taken by females steadily went down to 80
books
.
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