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Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem and how could the situation be improved

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Today, cities around the world are facing huge problems
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 transport delays.
Although
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 several
people
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 believe
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 is caused by the lack of infrastructure others claim
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 happening because of
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people
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 who only think of themselves. In my opinion, both complete each other and no matter how much millions of authorities invest in structures if their citizens don't have community thoughts. I'll discuss both
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 in
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 thesis. To commence, almost all ancient cities aren't created thinking of the future,
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, individuals have been struggling with bump-to-bump traffics
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 facing some mental disorders
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 as anxiety and burnout for spending many hours driving to work and home as well. To support
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 statement, an article written by the BBC Brasil brings vital data which advocates in favour of
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 who only think of themselves
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 as the lack of security, lack of public transport, and no one benefits for those who decide to share a ride with others. To be honest,
people
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 have been facing poor conditions for a long time, and nowadays,
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 has to be different.
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, for minimizing the poor structure authorities must invest in public transportation
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 as underground subways, bicycle paths, and highways to connect towns with dormitory cities.
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, taking care of
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's commute will improve the quality of life
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 provide less gas pollution in the air. Still, governors can't overlook those
people
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 who are environment friendly and they need to create good initiatives for them, like less car tax, cashback and some others.
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, politicians and
people
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 should work together and create some good habits to
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 the world a good and pleasant place to live as a community. Of course that having many options to commute is extremely significant for society's development,
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, a good relationship among humans has to be the best one.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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