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Some people believe that unemployed people should be made to work for their welfare/benefit payments. Others, however, see this as cheap labour.
Discuss the possible advantages and disadvantages of making unemployed people take any job.
Do you believe that making unemployed people work is a good idea?

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I do not believe that unemployed
people
 should be given money for doing nothing.
However
, I accept that some
people
 are unable to
work
 through disabilities or ill health, in which case welfare payments are appropriate. Other than these
excep- tions
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, I see no reason why benefit claimants should not be made to
work
 for their money like everyone else has to. There are many advantages to working. It can help the long-term unemployed get back into the routine of
work
. It is very easy to get out of the habit of getting up early in the morning and working from ‘9 to 5’. There are self-esteem and confidence issues to consider. Working provides
people
 with a sense of purpose and self-worth. It is easy to become socially isolated if you are out of
work
,
whereas
 working forces you to meet new
people
. You might find something that you like doing or even learn new skills. It
also
 looks good on your CV if you have been working rather than doing nothing. I found permanent
work
 after a period of voluntary
work
 in a charity shop. The disadvantages of being made to
work
 centre on the type of
work
that is
avail- able
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. If you are a professional person
then
 manual
work
 may be unsuitable for you. To save money, some employers might use unemployed
people
 to do
work
 that should be done by an employee. I think that making unemployed
people
 do some
work
 for their welfare payments is a good idea.
However
, the workers should have some choice in the
work
 that they do and it needs to be organized properly so that the employers cannot exploit them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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