In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is universally acknowledged that mankind is suffering from the lack of food around the world. Despite the
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it is going to end up horribly for
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. There are many issues that have to be solved,
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government should accentuate especially the field of agriculture,
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. Some type of
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could no longer be used ton growing plants
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since it has no
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other fields,
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, which cannot be separated
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no longer intake products are
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resources. Even
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new technologies cannot prevent
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of destroying,
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issue can be solved by including the government in it, since without it,
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of countries
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aring atrocious methods of developing the
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conditions. It happens because of the opportunity of earning more money.
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it is understandable, including the lack of
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are using simple methods of growing, which
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of supporting
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demand products
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but do not care about nature as well.
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around the world should support and provide farmers with convenient conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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