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Nowadays, it has become easier and more affordable for people to visit other countries. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In recent days going abroad tends to be accessible for many public and it
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 less difficult to afford and reach the cost that needs to go to another state even for transportation. It contributes the positive development because it can fulfil many
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's dreams
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 abroad. On the other, hand it would be challenging because of making the update of rule regulations for tourist management. Many communities have thought to can get experience in another region whether it is for vacation or study abroad for higher education. By the easier and more affordable to visit another land it can fulfil their dreams and can make them have a meaningful life.
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 who want to study abroad, can upgrade their knowledge and
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 for skills to be applied in work and pursue their dream job. Anyone who
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 has the intention to go on vacation can be happy directly and lively to see the historical
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 or beautiful scenery from other countries.
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 coming and going from one
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 to another
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 can give more homework for the
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's government to manage the policy of tourists. Every tourist brings their unique character to have attitude. Sometimes there are still folk who don't obey the rules because of their habits from their origin
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. There is a rule to keep every visited place clean, but there are still
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 to throw the trash
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in the right place. The government should continuously update the tourism rules for better regulation. In a nutshell, my own view is that the convenience of
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 visiting another
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 can help
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 to achieve their dreams. But the government should
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 attention to how to manage visitors that
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 come from any
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