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It is responsibility of individuals to save and provide for their own retirement. Governments have no obligations to provide this benefit. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement?

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The pie chart compares the generation of
electricity
 from renewable and all types of sources during 2009.
Overall
 we can see how Germany produces more energy and mostly relies on conventional thermal
while
 France generates
electricity
 mostly from nuclear .
To begin
 with, the amount of
electricity
 generated by Germany in 2009 is 560 Billion kWh. Of all types of energies, France relies on conventional thermal for
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58% , 23%
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 nuclear and
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17,4%
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 renewables. For what concern the slice of the pie; 39,3% was produced thanks to Biomass, and 36,9 with Wind. Hydroelectric contributed only 17,7%
while
 solar by 6,1.
On the other hand
, in France, 76% of the energy
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 with Nuclear power, and 10,3% in conventional thermal and renewables are 13,7% of the total amount of
electricity
 produced. Of
this
 13,7%, Hydroelectric represents 80,5%,
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 is 10,5% and biomass 8%. An insignificant 0,9 is generated by solar power.
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