As well as making money, businesses also have a responsibilty towards society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
century, which is known as a technology century, social media is increasing strongly and that
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seem
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make any non-social media like
TV
, radio or
newspaper
is
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forgotten,
become
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and become
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useless. Nowadays, it’s difficult to see a person use
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newspaper
, today they always read
news
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on
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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due to
it
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convenience,
more
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and more
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film isn’t watched on
tv
but on
mobile
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phone or Ipad. Now, Social media software is replacing
TV
or
newspaper
gradually and if that still
happen
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in a long time
i
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believe that in the future
Newspaper
and
TV
will be replaced and
disapear
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disappear
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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