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Some people believe that we have too many choices. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this Statement?

#people #choices
In
this
 century, people are given options not in all fields but certainly in most areas. Sometimes mankind is getting confused because it is becoming harder and harder to decide on. I completely accept that we have a lot of variety in our modernized lives and I will support my
opinin
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opinion
 with some examples.
Firstly
, city dwellers in the past had a limitation of alternatives in most
part
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 especially in job_related lines,
for example
, in our city the majority of
bread winners
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breadwinners
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 had to take part as
an
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 blue_collar Workers owing to there were not any other manufacturing parts for those who were not eager to. Thanks to the development of Technology
that
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expand industry in a lot of pieces
such
 as primary, secondary and service
industry
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industries
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 which gives persons to have a variety of choices.
Secondly
, there is no doubt
this
 marvellous century has changed the clothing way
.
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In addition
, most citizens have a closet full of different kinds of
customes
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customs
 for putting on altered ceremonies compared to people
on
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in
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 those days
had
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who had
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 few
dress
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 to wear.
On the other hand
, having too many choices lead people to become possessive and certainly want
every thing
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everything
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 to be their own
while
 after getting the material which they have to pay
through
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for through
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nose
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their nose
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 afterwards, take
mobile
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the mobile
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 phone as an example, they feel bored and Desire new_established one. In conclusion,
although
 having too many Selections in our lives gives
the
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us the
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 freedom of being able to Choice
your
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our
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 Favorite ones in earning sector or clothing, it has negative effects in
this
 modernized century
such
 as becoming possessive and Desire to ownership
everything
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of everything
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.
Personal
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, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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