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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
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 some people always have a positive view
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 with spending their lives trying to minimize the possibility of
change
. Avoiding changes helps to make existing processes less
energy consuming
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.
Along with
 that, openness to novelty is better a approach for
broadeding
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broadening
 knowledge and boosting creativity. In my
opinion
, both attitudes can be effective when applied to
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 areas and stages of
life
.
At
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 the one hand,
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 following
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the same routes and methods can help to switch
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 autopilot mode. Most things can be done subconsciously in
this
 way, and,
therefore
, it is less likely that a person
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 tired. A good example of
that is
 a daily schedule. After following some routine for a few weeks it becomes a chunk of habits, and
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 adopts
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that rhythm. In my
opinion
,
such
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 is extremely effective in career development and
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 the later stages of
life
 when cognitive functions cannot be utilized with the same intensity as during
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young ages.
On the other hand
,
change
 and experimentation are beneficial to expand understanding
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 the world and
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 creativity. Switching between jobs or geographical locations can show the same things
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 different angles. Wide experience can help better realize personal preferences and make better choices in
life
.
For example
, it is common in
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western countries to take a gap year for travelling to a different country before going to a university. After seeing a completely different environment it should be easier to come up with ideas on how to spend
own
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life
. In my
opinion
, making changes frequently is a positive thing during
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young ages and in areas which do not require stability (e.g. hobbies and entertainment).
To conclude
, an absence of
change
 is good for preserving energy, and a presence of
change
 is good for learning more in interesting ways. In my
opinion
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 both approaches are
apropriate
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appropriate
 at certain periods and areas of
life
.
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