Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

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the same job applicants market as the young population. In my opinion, it often causes anxiety ad depression because of the fear to be outcompeted, and
companies
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employment to increase people’s value over time.
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competition among different ages is a frequent cause to trigger a wide spectrum of
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negative feelings by reminding
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older people that they probably have not gained any marketable expertise. In a
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today, many jobs are regularly vanishing because of
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of disruptive technologies. Skills that lead to
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salaries today, can be completely outdated tomorrow.
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a person should start his or her career from a blank page.
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decades ago the United States and other developed countries experienced deindustrialization when manufacturing moved to China. Unfortunately, not everyone was able to overcome frustration
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drug addictions. To reduce the discussed problem
companies
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and courses in different topics. Some lessons can be directed to improve
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related to an employee’s role. In
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it will be less likely that they will
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in junior positions. Other lessons can give a broad explanation of functions from other departments. In
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it will be easier to switch from
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one area to another.
For example
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and conduct seminars about
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roles to make communication between
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members more
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understandable
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anxiety and depression because of the need to compete with younger people, and
companies
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in different areas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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