Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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society is sure that adding more places for sport is the best approach for improving public health.
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part thinks that the effect on
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case is minimal and advocates for other solutions. In my opinion, creating more infrastructure for
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activities can stimulate people to
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more active physically, but it is not as
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important as providing access to professional healthcare.
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the one hand, a high number of gyms and workout locations removes a lot of blockers when a person is trying to
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it is a good idea to go there.
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movement, and it helps to reduce health issues related to
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, when I lived in a place near a park with tracks for running, I had much more enthusiasm to use them
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a few times a week compared to times when I lived in other places.
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hand, there are much more problems other than
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, and the best solution to deal with them is ensuring that professional healthcare is available for everyone. Issues related to a poor diet or unhealthy lifestyle often can be
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from a good doctor. It can quickly increase an average life expectancy by a few years. Unfortunately, not all countries have that.
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, in the United States people are often scared to go to a hospital, because it can
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up with a huge bill or even
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creating more sports facilities is beneficial for public health, it is far from being the best way to improve it. Providing affordable medical services is much more important for keeping
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in a good condition.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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