Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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the one hand, a high number of gyms and workout locations removes a lot of blockers when a person is trying to Change preposition
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hand, there are much more problems other than Correct quantifier usage
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, and the best solution to deal with them is ensuring that professional healthcare is available for everyone. Issues related to a poor diet or unhealthy lifestyle often can be Correct your spelling
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pieces of advices
advices
from a good doctor. It can quickly increase an average life expectancy by a few years. Unfortunately, not all countries have that. Correct your spelling
advice
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, in the United States people are often scared to go to a hospital, because it can Linking Words
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creating more sports facilities is beneficial for public health, it is far from being the best way to improve it. Providing affordable medical services is much more important for keeping Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite