You have bought a new camera but when you got home it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • introduce yourself • explain the situation • say what action you would like the company to take.

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I'm writing to you concerning a recent issue with a

camera

that I purchased from your store. My name is Shabnam and I bought a

camera

from your store

last

month.

However

, upon reaching home, I realized that the

camera

had some technical problems. I returned the

camera

to your store and spoke with one of your representatives about the

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issue

issues

a week ago. They told me they would fix it. Unfortunately, it has been a week and I have

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heard anything about the status of the repair. I really need

this

camera

because recently when I

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go on a trip with my family, I want to take pictures of the fun I have with my family.

You

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prompt attention to

this

matter will be greatly appreciated. The delay

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getting it repaired has caused me frustration . I kindly request that you expedite the repair process and provide me with

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at your earliest convenience. Thank you for your assistance in resolving

this

issue. Yours faithfully Shabnam.

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coherence cohesion

To further improve the coherence and cohesion, make sure to structure your paragraphs in a way that each contains a single major idea. This will make your letter even clearer.

task achievement

Ensure all minor grammatical and spelling errors are corrected to make your text more fluent and polished. For example, 'issu' should be 'issue' and 'no heard' should be 'not heard'.

coherence cohesion

Your letter has a clear greeting and closing, which adds to the formal tone of the letter.

task achievement

The writing tone is suitable and polite, making your request come across effectively and considerately.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

170 words

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