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Shopping online is becoming much popular in todays world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

#todays #world #trend
Todays
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Today
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,
people
 have
lifestyle
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a lifestyle
the lifestyle
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 of
love
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loving
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 to
being
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be
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 in their places and
order
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ordering
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products
 that they want by shopping online. Various
of
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apply
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products
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areproducts
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on
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apply
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online able to give
the
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apply
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customers
a
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apply
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great
experiences
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experience
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 by
people
can
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who can
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brought
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bring
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the product
a product
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product
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products
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 from a
store
 anywhere in the
world
.
However
, shopping
onilne
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online
 sometime would not
be
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apply
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able
to
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apply
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present
same
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the same
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 feeling as
they
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apply
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buying
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buy
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in
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in-store
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store
. In my opinion, shopping online can deliver a
comforable
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comfortable
way
 of buying
products
 but can not give
people
a full experiences
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full experiences
a full experience
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 like in the
store
. Online shopping gave
people
 a
comforable
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comfortable
way
 to buy any
products
 from any
parts
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part
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 of the
world
. Shopping online is a popular
way
 in
todays
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today's
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world
 by able to fix
people
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people's
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 problems by giving
people
 that have no
time
 lifestyle a
way
 to search
a
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for a
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product
 and
time
 to buy want they want because they do not go to the
store
 to buy a
product
 and it is a wonderful
eway
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way
 to save a
time
 in their life.
For instance
, certain
persons
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people
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 might live
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in difference
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difference
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different
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 parts of the
world
 but want to buy a
product
 from another of the
world
 so shopping from
onilne
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online
 is a great path to buy
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the product
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product
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products
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 that
want
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wants
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 with no need to travel to that country.
People
 might not able to get a full experience from buying
products
 from
onilne
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online
. Online shopping might give
people
 a more
comforable
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comfortable
way
 to buy it and
safe
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save
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the
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apply
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time
. But, some of the
products
 need to buy it only in the shop to get a full
exprtience
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experience
 of shopping.
For example
,
car
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the car
a car
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 is the
on
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one
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 thing that you might not be able to buy it online and
having
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have
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 known all the
feeling
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feelings
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 about the car that you want. In conclusion,
in
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at
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 present the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 buying a thing online have
increaseingly
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increasingly
increasing
by
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with
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 the changes
of
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in
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people
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people's
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 lifestyle. Even though
,
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apply
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 it might not able to deliver a full experience of that person feeling
of
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about
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 the
product
 but it
able
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is able
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 to give
people
 a very good
way
 to order the
product
any
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from any
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parts
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part
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 of the
world
todays
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today
.
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