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For some prople learning in a group is most effective way, while others prefer one-to-one instructions. Discuss both views. what is your opinion?

#prople #group #one-to-one #instructions
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It has been argued by many individuals that group learning is an important thing,
whereas
 opponents reckon that commoners need to
study
 alone. In my opinion, I favour the latter perspective;
however
,
this
 essay shall dwell on both viewpoints in the subsequent paragraphs. Foremost, the fundamental benefit of studying with
team
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the team
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 is that learners might learn extra knowledge from them. When scholars
do
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study
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a study
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 with their classmates, they would improve their confidence levels, communication skills and team spirit.
For instance
, it is published an article by The Tribune newspaper showed that 75% of the tutees prefer to do education with their peers as sometimes they do not understand anything
then
 they explain in a better method with
this
 they easily acknowledge. Paradoxically, undergraduates may more concentrate on the academic field if they do
study
 one-to-one instructions because some mentees do misbehave
while
study
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 because of less
inetrest
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interest
 in it.
Consequently
, intelligent students feel
irritate
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 when they do work
together with
 them, whilst when they
study
 by themselves, they get good marks in the class owing to focusing on education.
For example
, it is published an article by The Tribune newspaper showed that in America
the
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students are more successful because they usually
study
 without
help
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the help
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 of other human beings.
According to
 me, not only
postgraduates
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do postgraduates
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 acquire information
how
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on how
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to do
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do
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to
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 work by
oneself
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themselves
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 but
also
 become
experienced
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an experienced
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person
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people
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.
To conclude
,
although
 teamwork is a good way to enhance problem-solving skills, I personally believe that once they
study
 alone, they may get a good image in their society by getting high scores.
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