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Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #government #health #care #education #government’s #responsibility
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Nowadays, there are more and more
people
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 asking for free
education
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 and free medical service. The issue of whether the
government
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 should pay for health care and
education
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 is widely debated. In my opinion, the
government
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 should be responsible for providing
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 free service to poor
people
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 but not the rich. It is generally accepted that one of the obligations of the
government
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 is that
people
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's life quality must be ensured. All
people
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 in a country should receive
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education
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 and health care. Unfortunately, there are always some
people
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 who can not afford their educational and medical
cost
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costs
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. These poor
people
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 are unlikely to make a large amount of
money
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 within a short time
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 multiple reasons,
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 as lack of skills and disabilities, but they still need to survive. In light of that, the
government
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 must take care of them, and they should not pay anything for their health and
education
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.
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,
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 it is ideal that the
government
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 offer free
education
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 and free medical resources to everyone,
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 is often unrealistic
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limited
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 budget of the
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. The
government
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 still need
money
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 in many areas,
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 as infrastructure and national defence.
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, rich
people
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 can choose to attend private schools to improve the quality of their
education
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 by paying the tuition. These wealthy
people
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 are even supposed to pay more taxes so that the
government
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 can provide better welfare.
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, if they still get educational grants from the
government
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,
this
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money
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 is actually wasted. In conclusion, I think that the
government
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 is obligated to offer free medical and educational resources to citizens who really lack
money
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.
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, rich
people
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 should pay their own medical and educational
expense
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expenses
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • access
  • basic services
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • public health
  • well-being
  • human capital
  • economic development
  • individual responsibility
  • educational attainment
  • taxpayers
  • inefficiency
  • lack of choice
  • private sector
  • quality
  • innovation
  • accessible
  • affordable
  • role
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