Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV.   To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people emphasize that people who read books can think very widely than
who
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those who
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would like to watch
TV
. I completely agree with
this
opinion and think that reading
book
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a book
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is much more important than
watch
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watching
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TV
. First of all, I believe that reading
book
gives people more knowledge and imagination. Watching
TV
wastes
peopleʼs
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people's
time
while
someone is taking a number of information.
For example
, at the
time
of
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Navai lived there was
not
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no
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the
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TV
set. He did not watch
TV
, but he had
very
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a very
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high level of vocabulary. So
that
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, it is more important to read
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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any
time
.
Secondly
,
reading
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the reading
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book
keeps you motivated. If you read a
book
, you will
interest
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to
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in
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next events in the next pages. When you finish it, you feel a big conclusion,
then
you will never forget about it. If you watch
TV
during
this
time
, you may not remember it later.
For instance
,
a
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the
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famous writer Abdulla Kahhar was very impressed
from
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by
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a story by Oʻtkir Khoshimov. He said
his
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he
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never read
this
kind of pure work.
Thus
, books give you
more
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a more
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relaxing mood.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that reading books is more beneficial than watching
TV
,
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because it expands the readerʼs vocabulary and helps to spend
time
significantly.
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