1-Parents should take courses in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children. To what extent do you agree?

to keep them ready for parenthood - to have
knowledge
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a good parent is quite challenging and taking care of
youngs
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is not an easy job. I would argue that having them
on
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in
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class
provide
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provides
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knowledge
on how to raise
children
not only that it prepared them for the hardship of parenthood. I strongly agree with
this
notion as
this
these measures
is
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essential in parenting.
Parents
play a vital role in our
childrens
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lives,
therefore
attending courses to improve their
children
's lives
keep
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them ready for any future difficulty of raising them. Youngster as we know is hard to manage, understand, and
demanding
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that tend to test their patience to the limit. The
underpressure
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and untrained mother will react with unwanted actions
such
as yelling and shaming, sometimes
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leading
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to beating as punishment for their
misdemeanor
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. If
parents
are
will
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well
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prepared, they can identify and able to
handled
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their
children
's
outburst
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and tantrums
that
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allows them to handle
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the situation
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situation
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situations
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smoothly. Having
right
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the right
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knowledge
hinders care providers
in
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giving emotional traumas to their young ones which can
acquired
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be acquired
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only by attending specialized
class
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classes
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,
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like courses
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that emphazise
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emphazise
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emphasise
soley
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solely
on managing
child's
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a child's
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growth and development.
Hence
a child with a parent that openly
support
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,
listen
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listens
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, and in a harmonious family environment often
succeed
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succeeds
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in their life and work endeavours.
However
, learning is not all happening inside the classroom, these can be achieved by seeing and listening to others in the community with
children
, and most of the
times
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time
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inside
in
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apply
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our homes. Like mirroring the way our
parents
brought us into a
well mannered
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, responsible, and
respectfull
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respectful
person that
this
connect
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in
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to
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our childhood upbringing.
Although
,
this
is not applicable to all since not everyone
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the same experienced and home environment, making guided learning effective. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, I strongly agree that it's a must for
parents
to take courses in parenting in order to alleviate the lives of their
children
.
Although
, I acknowledge the merit of the
presonal
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personal
experienced
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can be
source
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a source
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of good parenting, albeit it is not as effective with the right
knowledge
that can be
aquired
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acquired
by professional guided learning.
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