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Some people think watching television is bad for children in every way other belive it is good for devolping children as they grow up discuss both views and give your own opinion

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A fair portion of people thinks that watching
television
 is not good for
children
 in every way other people opine that watching
television
 improves their growing period.
This
 essay intends to analyse both sides of the argument and express my side of the argument On the one hand, nowadays most young ones are spending time on
television
 watching their favourite
television
 program.To be clearer, watching
television
 for the entire period brings addictive behaviour in
children
thus
, the
children
 will deviate from academic
this
 impact their living standard.On top of that,the
children
 become lazier to engage in any productive activity and
this
 brings down physical activity that they do in their regular routine.
Apart from
this
 certain eye-related diseases may occur.
On the other hand
,
while
 watching
television
children
 benefit in many ways.
Firstly
,
this
 enhances the
knowledge
 of the
children
while
 watching
television
 Program
that is
 related to information basis can widen the
knowledge
 of the
children
Moreover
,the
children
 can spend their valuable time with their family sp
this
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 can increase the bond between the family members ,
As a
result
Add the comma(s)
,result
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children
 can free from the hectic academic lifestyle Having Scurtinged both views, I have come to the point where the
children
 need to watch the
television
 because engaging in these activities can reduce the stress and strain they face in their academic life and
also
 the
children
 can reduce the friendship with bad peer groups for certain level
as well as
 the
children
 can broaden the
knowledge
 about a certain field. So
this
 can take them to a good the position
To sum up
,
although
 a few people say
television
 is bad ,I think
television
 is good for
children
's development
such
 increase family bonding and sharpening the
knowledge
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