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Some people think government should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not the government responsibility Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #government #health #care #education #responsibility
A fair portion of the
people
think
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 that the
government
 should spend money
for
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on
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 medical
care
 and knowledge
enhancment
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enhancement
where as
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whereas
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 others opine that it is not
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the authority
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authority
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authority's
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 duty to pay.
This
 essay intends to analyse both
side
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 of
argument
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the argument
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 and
conveying
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 my personal point of view On the one hand, the
government
 has several
duty
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duties
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 and
responsibility
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responsibilities
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 that need to be given to the common
citiyen
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citizen
citizens
 to fulfil their needs To be clearer, the
government
 is collecting
massive
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amount
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amounts
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 of tax from the common masses
this
 amount should be given to
people
 as tax returns in the form free
education
 and medical
care
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, as well as the government primary goal,
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as well as
 the
government
 primary goal
is provide
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education
primary goal is provide
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education
 and safe and secure each
people
 life.
For instance
,
the
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South American country like Canada is giving priority to
education
 and medical
care
, they kept aside
a
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money for
this
 facility.
On the other hand
,
the
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other
people
 think that the
government
 has no role to give
education
 and medical
care
 because the
government
 has other major problems to resolve in their economy
such
poverty
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as poverty
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 and infrastructure facilities
Moreover
the
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they
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 put forward certain policy to
enhand
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enhance
enhanced
 the rural area So
this
 a
heactic
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hectic
 task for the authority to cope up on top of the at, they need to improve the transport system
such
 road, railway, bus to ensure the moving from one place to other
more
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smoother and as long the logistics facilities Having
scurtinzed
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scrutinized
 both the views, from my side I stick on with
government
 should give
education
 and medical
care
 free to the common
people
 to make
their
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it
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 more feasible to live in the country and as long
education
 is the first and
formost
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foremost
 element for economic boost up. So they should
empasinge
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emphasise
 on
this
 element rather than the other sector
To sum up
,
although
 a fair portion of the opine that
education
 and medical
care
is
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are
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 not
government
 duty, I think it is
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the government
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government
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government's
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 responsibility to provide
education
 and medical
care
 free to the
people
 because
education
 is important for economic development and health is the
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most
atmost
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most
priportiy
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priority
 that authority should give
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