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From the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be engouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#decades #tourism #people #communities
The act of getting to explore other people's
culture
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,
belief
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 and way of life is
otherwise
 known as tourism. Some
person's
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people
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 are of the belief that it should be encouraged because of its benefits to the
economy
,we will be discussing
extensivelybon
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extensively
whether
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about whether
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 it should be encouraged or discouraged. International tourism can be beneficial to an
economy
 because it
a
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great source of income
to
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for
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 the receiving community. It is an
economy
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 booster.
For
instance
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 Dubai was a desert before it was built and converted into a country with amazing
structure
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 and great sights, a lot of individuals travel from far and wide just to experience
it's
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 uniqueness and it has
thus
 elevated their
economy
 Relatively tourism
also
help
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 improve a country's exchange rate because the more sought after their currency is,the more
it's
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its
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 usefulness increases. In my
opinion
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 I believe it should be encouraged because its benefits to a community far
exceeds
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it's
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 detriments.
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