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Living in a country where you have to Speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as pratical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this Statement?

#country #language
These days, heading
a
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homey with the aim
for
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 living or
studing
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studying
 is a conventional attempt among people from all around the world.
Moreover
, the enthusiasm of broaden horizons is being enhanced among youth.
conversely
, expatriates may face severe
sociable
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 and practical difficulties in
alien
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an alien
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 land. I disagree with
this
 idea and I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that after spending an enormous period of time overseas newly settled man's mind can integrate with the head society and accept differences. Take
an
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 university student as an example. The guy
undoubteldy
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undoubtedly
aftre
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after
 living for two or three years
become
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 reluctant to
gets
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 back to
its
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their
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 own country.
Moreover
, being a part of that society
along with
 spending time with locals would diminish social misunderstanding. What's more,
language
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the language
a language
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 barrier can be surmountable by signing up
in
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for
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 language courses
as well as
practicing
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practising
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 regularly.
Secondly
, it is proven by statistics that a high amount of successful companies have external
administors
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administrators
 who had been disabled to head a conversation at first but they managed to learn foreign
expression
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expressions
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 and speak like natives
consequently
.
Furthermore
, job-related issues can be tackled with colleagues who give you a helping hand by teaching you the ropes of the speech and
additionally
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 if you do not have
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a bigosted
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bigosted
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bigoted
 Boss, you could be promoted to a senior position.
On the other hand
, many are not prepared for learning a novel Communication even if they keep struggling to resolve their mistakes so under certain circumstances, they become frustrated and commence to hate
chief
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 city dwellers. In conclusion,
although
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living overseas could have several social_related puzzles because of the limitation in expression and practical_related troubles as well. It can be solved by
practicing
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practising
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 and striking up
frienship
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friendships
friendship
 with inhabitants.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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