The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The bar chart illustrates the proportions of
expenditures
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expenditure
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shares
for five different categories in
USA
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the USA
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, Canada,
UK
and Japan in a time slot
that is
2009.
Overall
, it is obviously presented that almost all nations had the most
shares
for housing,
while
the lowest
shares
portions recorded for Health Care and Clothing in the given year. In terms of food,
Japan
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Japan's
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expenditures
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shares
were
the
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apply
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higher
of
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by
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around 23% being higher than
UK
’s
shares
by approximately 3%. Canada and
USA
had around 15% and 13% sharing percentages, respectively. Housing Spending
Shares
hit
the
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a
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peak in
USA
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the USA
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of
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at
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just over 25%,
while
UK
and Japan
had
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registered
a share values
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share values
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of about 24% and 22% to outrace Canada’s Share by around 3%. As is seen, Transportation’s spending
shares
were 20% in Canada, and it accounted for 17% and 15% in
UK
and
USA
respectively.
However
, Health care and clothing had the least
shares
proportions of around 4% in
UK
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the UK
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and 6% in
USA
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the USA
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words shares, usa, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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