Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Eating a wholesome meal is the best way to be healthy.
However
, many argue that restraining from consuming
meat
or fish is not only healthy but
also
good for the planet. I agree
to
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this
opinion and in
this
essay, I will outline my reasoning. A vegetarian
diet
is much healthier than a
meat based
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diet
. A vegetarian
diet
could pack a lot of nutrients with a mix of vegetables,
fuits
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fruits
and
millets
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. Millets are considered to be rich in nutrients that cannot be matched by any
meat
.
Furthermore
,
a
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research done by the American medical society argues that a person following a balanced vegetarian
diet
can outlive a person following a
meet
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meat
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based
diet
. In essence, the vegetarian
diet
is proven to be much healthier than
meat based
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meat-based
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diet
.
Meat
production farms are causing damage to the planet. Methane produced by cows in the farms
are
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one of the largest
polluter
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polluters
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of
green house
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greenhouse
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gases,
out ranking
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outranking
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CO2 produced by cars. Methane traps the heat from the sun and eventually contributes to global warming. It's proved by studies conducted around the world that if
one third
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of the people give up eating
meat
, it could cool the earth by 15%.
Subsequently
, it proves that
the
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animal farms are a serious hazard to
earth
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. In conclusion, individuals should adopt a balanced
diet
to keep themselves fit.
However
, a
meat based
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diet
is not only causing damage to
earth
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,
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but
also
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is also
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ruled to be not healthy as a vegetarian
diet
. I strongly
beleive
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believe
by eating a meal without
meat
is helpful
to
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in
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maintian
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maintain
fitness and
also
fight
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fighting
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against global warming.
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