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Some people think watching sports is wastage of leisure time. To what extent do you agree or agree or disagree?

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A number of folks argue that Enjoying watching
sports
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 during free
time
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 is a bad idea ,
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 I partially agree with
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 as some
people
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 like to spend their
time
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 watching
sports
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while
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 other can do some productive work
such
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 as painting or some physical activity involving games.
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 essay will elaborate on my point of view thoroughly. Commencing with the most prominent reason why
people
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 want to spend their leisure
time
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 watching
sports
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 is that they need some moments of joy with less physical activity.
People
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 feel the thrill during the game
time
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 seeing players playing the match.
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, an individual generally has a favourite sport or team and wants to watch playing as soon as
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 gets free
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. Watching a match live creates a lifelong memory one can never want to miss.
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, whenever a person gets free
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 he watches
sports
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. Despite the given argument, it may be a waste of
time
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 for others.
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 is owing to, that there are other
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 too which can be useful to do
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 as painting, singing or playing chess.
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 , playing chess requires the presence of mind
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 proper planning skills to win the game.
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, it not only enhances the capabilities of the doer but
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 one can spend free
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 in a more productive way
while
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 actively participating. In ,addition leisure
time
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 is meant to relax our mind and body and doing painting and singing-like
activities
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 will ease our mind and gives us moments of joy.
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, some
people
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 prefer other
activities
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 over watching games in their free
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. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 like to sit and watch their favourite players or team playing yet others prefer to do other hands-on
activities
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 in their leisure
time
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.
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