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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the expenditure of families for nine items in
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 nation every week
from1968
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from 1968
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 2018.
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, it can be clearly seen that the biggest
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 is food and the lowest is fuel and power during 1998.
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, it is different in 2018 where the highest is leisure and the lowest is personal goods. A closer look at the chart that in 1968 the majority of people spent their money on food which was just over a third and the highest
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 during the time frame. Meanwhile, it was different in 2018 when leisure gained more than a fifth which was higher compared with all spending by time.
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, the fuel and power were below
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 in ten which was lower than others in 1968. Similar to 1968, in 2018 not only fuel and power but
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 personal goods obtained the
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 position to allocate money and both of them were the same which were nearly 5 %.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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