Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

musical
instruments
have the capability to amuse many people , especially
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events, concerts, and birthday parties. Whilst many candidates spend their whole life playing
music
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a waste of time. I think that masterpieces are meaningful and quintessential in our life. On the one hand,
music
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different fields. It means that it is a necessary subject in curriculums, and it has many
benifits
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benefits
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people's minds and moods.
In addition
, it has a
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therapeutic
effect on
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humankind.
For example
, some psychologists display a specific type of
music
which aids in curing many psychological diseases
such
as depression and schizophrenia.
Furthermore
, millions of concerts are held
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different occasions
such
as national and
relegious
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religious
festivals, and musical
instruments
are the major component of these events. What can be said is that
music
is
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common language all over the world.
On the other hand
, some students were not naturally talented and interested in learning
music
.
In other words
, if the opportunity allows them to play, they will probably
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in performing well.
Moreover
, some individuals do not prefer listening to
music
because they consider it
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a source of distraction. A clear example is persons who
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not the ability to work in a noisy environment ; it affects their performance at work. On top of that, many students
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stucked
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stuck
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primary school because
music
subject has been imposed on them by their teachers. These examples show the suffering of many juniors and communities from musical
instruments
. In conclusion,
after
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musical
instruments
, it can be said that
music
should be an optional subject in
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school. I reiterate my opinion that evaluation tests should be done before choosing the students in musical bands.
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