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Some people say that a person’s success is as a direct result of the way they were brought up by their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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IN TODAY'S COMPLEX WORLD WE ARE DEALING WITH VARIOUS TYPES OF PEOPLE. IN REALITY, THE FAMILY'S METHODS OF RAISING THEIR
CHILDREN
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 HAVE AN IMPORTANT ROLE IN THEIR LIFE. I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH THE STATEMENT AS
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 ARE ALWAYS INSPIRED BY THEIR
PARENTS
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 AND KEEP ON WITH THEIR AIM. IN THE ESSAY, I WILL SUPPORT MY VIEW WITH EXAMPLES OF THE FORMER ARGUMENT.
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 ARE RESPONSIBLE TO GROW CONFIDENCE IN THEIR KIDS IN DIFFERENT WAYS. MORALE IS THE MOST SIGNIFICANT THING YOUNG PEOPLE NEED; IT IS THE QUALITY THAT THEY NEED TO FACE THE MOST CHALLENGING SITUATIONS IN LIFE.
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CHILDREN
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 WHO ACQUIRE CONFIDENCE SINCE CHILDHOODTHEY TEND TO BE MORE INDEPENDENT AND DECISION-MAKERS.
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, ENCOURAGING THEM TO PLAY SPORTS, IS ANOTHER OTHER
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 TO SCOLD THEM FOR THEIR MISTAKES AND CORRECT THEM WITH A
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 TO DESCRIBE WHAT'S RIGHT AND WRONG FOR THEM.
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, FAMILY HAVE AN IMPORTANT ROLE IN RAISING CONFIDENCE IN GENERATIONS.
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, EXAMPLES ARE THE CORRECT
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 TO TEACH THEM. THE YOUNGER GENERATION ALWAYS FOLLOWS THEIR ROLE MODELS, EITHER IT IS GOOD OR BAD. SO, IT IS VERY IMPORTANT TO BE A GOOD GUIDE FOR YOUR CHILD.
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, IF THEY SAW YOU HELPING OLD PEOPLE,
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 THEY WILL DO THE SAME AND IF THEY REALISE YOU ARE PROFESSIONAL IN YOUR WORK SIMILARLYTHEY WILL PURSUE THE BEST IN THEIR CAREER.
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 SHOULD BE A GOOD EXAMPLE AND TRY TO INFLUENCE THEIR
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 WITH ACTIONS MORE THAN WORDS.
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,
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’ ACTIONS AND
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 OF RAISING DIRECTLY AFFECT THE FUTURE AND CAREER OF THEIR CHILD. I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT
PARENTS
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 ARE THE CREATOR OF KIDS' FUTURES. I RECOMMEND
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 TO BE GOOD TEACHERS SO THEIR
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 BECOME GOOD MENTORS AS WELL.
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