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Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with their co-workers while others like to keep their private life separate from work. Discuss both sides. Give your opinion.

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people
are spend
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 their free
time
 in many
way
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ways
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 some might
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do
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 it with
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friends
friend
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,
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have
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 to depend on the
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activities
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 that leisure
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 we have as well to use it as
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 as we have the
time
. In
this
 essay, I will give a reason
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 both views and elaborate
my
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 point of view below. On the one hand, some
people
 love to use their free
time
 with other
persons
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people
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 to enjoy their
liesure
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leisure
time
. There are certain types of
peole
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people
decide
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who decide
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 to use
free
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the free
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time
 with other
people
 by not staying alone to make
their
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 feel more worthy and enjoy
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every
minutes
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in
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 the moment.
For instance
, extrovert
people
 might have a habit to
spent
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 their free
time
to relax
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relaxing
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themself
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and it
recharge
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 better for them to
ready
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 for work
in
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the next day.
On the other hand
, various
of
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people
 keep their free
time
 to be alone and enjoy themself to have a better feeling with it. Doing any
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activities
activity
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 free
time
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make
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makes
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 tons of
people
have
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a great feeling
by
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about
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 it and
fullfill
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fulfil
 their
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leisure
time
 more effectively.
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,
introvert
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people
 find
the
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ways to enjoy themselves
individualy
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individually
such
 as watching movies in their room or just
be
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chilling
alnoe
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alone
 in a
restuarant
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restaurant
. In my opinion, we should
seperate
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separate
 which activities to doing it along and which
one
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ones
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 we
able
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are able
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 to enjoy with others to make it more
appreiate
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appropriate
on
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 our free
time
. A good
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 is that reading
a fiction books
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fiction books
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 we might love to spend
the
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time
 alone and going out to get some drinks or eat going with friends might be better options. In conclusion, both ways are good to spend our free
time
 on.
However
, it is better to know
ourselves
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apply
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what we need and which activities we want to
uase
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use
 alone or with others to make leisure most useful.
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