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Although more and more people read newspapers on the internet, newspapers will remain as the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many people view and read
informations
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information
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 on the
internet
. Newspapers are
also
 the main source of
information
. In today’s
information
 technology era, virtual
information
 is
also
 widespread. The first reason why I agree
internetical
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international
informations
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information
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 are quickly and easily accessible to people. Because the
internet
 is faster than mail. Waiting for the newspapers to arrive takes time and space. If a person needs a newspaper, he should go to the post office to buy a newspaper. Newspapers
causing
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 many distractions. The
internet
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Internet
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 is convenient as it provides comprehensive
information
. The second reason why I disagree the
internet
 is a distraction.
Therefore
, many distracting ads and games appear
while
 reading
information
 on the
internet
. It divides attention during the
read
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.
For example
, If you go to the
internet
, you will first come across various advertisements. These will definitely spoil the quality of
information
. It
also
 has many harmful effects on human health, especially
it
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 causes slow vision and pain in eye function. My opinion is that the
internet
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 is a necessary source of
information
 and can meet current requirements.
Furthermore
, any
information
 can be
obgained
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obtained
 from the
internet
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.
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