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Nowadays more and more teenagers take a gap year before entering university. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Educational
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 process is one of the important periods in adolescent life but in these
days
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 way of living, more and more youths become reluctant to continue studying without a break.
However
, what are the benefits of
this
 situation, and what are the drawbacks? In
this
 essay, I will look at the reasons for
this
 and propose some solutions. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of taking a gap year before entering
an
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university
. There is no doubt gaining valuable experiences
are
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 mostly possible by signing up
in
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 vocational courses so
this
 situation enhances the chance of taking full _time job and it will help to set aside an array of money for
university
 fees.
Additionally
, teens can broaden their horizons by travelling around the world and
gain
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 experience which could be
usefull
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useful
 in later life. Turning to the
otherside
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other side
 of
the
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argument. If
youngesters
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youngsters
 do not carry on studying, they would become lazy and
also
 unwilling to gain
university
 certificates. What's more, the
oppotunity
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opportunity
 of entering an elite
university
 could diminish because of the negative sides of
gap
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a gap
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 year;
furthermore
, these young adults can not land a decent job in the near future.
Moreover
,
university
 fees
is
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 going higher and higher as time goes by so they have to pay through their nose after returning. All things considered,
although
 taking a gap year between two educational periods could bring precious experience, it
also
 would harm
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 curriculum. Personally, I believe that its advantages will outweigh any negatives.
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