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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following process illustrates how chocolate is produced.
Overall
, it has 9 steps which started with growth in America, Africa, and Indonesia and end with pressed liquid chocolate produced.
To begin
 with, it grows on the cacao tree with ripe red pods shapes in America, Africa, and Indonesia.
In addition
, workers collect all pods to harvest them which have many white cocoa
beans
 in them.
Then
, collected all white cocoa
beans
 into the
beans
 fermented and spread in sun to dry.
The next step is
 that put all
beans
 dried on large scale to put them in a train or lorry to transport to the factory.
Then
, the
beans
 were roasted and the
beans
 crushed another shell was removed. In the end, the inner part pressed liquid chocolate produced.
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