The diagram show how chocolate is produced
The diagram explains the process of making pure chocolate.
A glance at the diagram reveals ten stages in the process before a bar of chocolate has been served.
The cocoa tree is commonly grown in America, Africa, and Indonesia. The fruit looks in trees with ripe red pods, with white coca inside the pods. After harvesting and collecting the coca beans in boxes to ferment, they spread under the sun to dry.
After that, they are placed into wide sacks to be delivered carefully by train direct to the factory.
Then
they are roasted under 350 degrees to meet the Linking Words
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couple of stages which are crushed and spread from their outer shell to the final stage, Linking Words
whereas
the inner part is pressed to happily liquid chocolate is produced .Linking Words
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