Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many

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argue that

teenagers

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' crime rates have been rising in modern society,

due to

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this

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, they say young

criminals

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should receive the same punishments as adult

criminals

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, I think we should discuss it from both angles. In general, most

teenagers

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still are

students

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, and they are learning the rules in

this

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society.

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, I personally think that it is actually a chance to teach

teenagers

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or those young children if they commit some crime. The tendency to commit

crimes

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always be shaped when

people

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were at

young

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age,

therefore

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, we should teach them

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apply

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the same treatment as adult

criminals

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or other

people

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in the world. It can help them to change their

behaviors

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the rest of their life.

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, some

people

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think that just because those

teenagers

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still learning as

students

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, they should be given the opportunity.

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they are committing the same

crimes

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as other

people

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such

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as stealing, drugging, and murdering, it is because they do not have enough knowledge and a mature mentality. We should forgive them and give them second chance, with love and support, and wish those

students

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can be better. By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that

teenagers

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commit

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who commit

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crimes

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whether it is minor or major should be treated

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with

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the same punishments as adult

criminals

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. In

this

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way, I think it can boost the deterrent, let

teenagers

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realize that it can be a serious

consequence

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if they do something wrong, and avoid young

students

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commit the same

crimes

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again.

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Apr 20, 2023

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