Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
argue that
teenagers
' crime rates have been rising in modern society,
due to
this
, they say young
criminals
should receive the same punishments as adult
criminals
.
However
, I think we should discuss it from both angles. In general, most
teenagers
still are
students
, and they are learning the rules in
this
society.
As a result
, I personally think that it is actually a chance to teach
teenagers
or those young children if they commit some crime. The tendency to commit
crimes
always be shaped when
people
were at
young
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age,
therefore
, we should teach them
by
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the same treatment as adult
criminals
or other
people
in the world. It can help them to change their
behaviors
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in
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the rest of their life.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that just because those
teenagers
still learning as
students
, they should be given the opportunity.
Although
they are committing the same
crimes
as other
people
such
as stealing, drugging, and murdering, it is because they do not have enough knowledge and a mature mentality. We should forgive them and give them second chance, with love and support, and wish those
students
can be better. By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that
teenagers
commit
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crimes
whether it is minor or major should be treated
by
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the same punishments as adult
criminals
. In
this
way, I think it can boost the deterrent, let
teenagers
realize that it can be a serious
consequence
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if they do something wrong, and avoid young
students
commit the same
crimes
again.
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