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Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 argue that
teenagers
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' crime rates have been rising in modern society,
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this
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, they say young
criminals
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 should receive the same punishments as adult
criminals
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.
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, I think we should discuss it from both angles. In general, most
teenagers
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 still are
students
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, and they are learning the rules in
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 society.
As a result
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, I personally think that it is actually a chance to teach
teenagers
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 or those young children if they commit some crime. The tendency to commit
crimes
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 always be shaped when
people
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 were at
young
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a young
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 age,
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, we should teach them
by
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the same treatment as adult
criminals
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 or other
people
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 in the world. It can help them to change their
behaviors
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in
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 the rest of their life.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that just because those
teenagers
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 still learning as
students
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, they should be given the opportunity.
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 they are committing the same
crimes
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 as other
people
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such
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 as stealing, drugging, and murdering, it is because they do not have enough knowledge and a mature mentality. We should forgive them and give them second chance, with love and support, and wish those
students
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 can be better. By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that
teenagers
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commit
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crimes
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 whether it is minor or major should be treated
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 the same punishments as adult
criminals
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. In
this
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 way, I think it can boost the deterrent, let
teenagers
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 realize that it can be a serious
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 if they do something wrong, and avoid young
students
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 commit the same
crimes
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 again.

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