In many countries, people go shopping only for their needs. However, recently it has become a development into a form of entertainment. Why do you think it happens? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, there are two groups of individuals who perceive the word "shopping" differently.
For the
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first group of
people
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is when they need to buy something
what
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they need.
However
, for the second group of
people
shopping it is
an
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entertainment. I have some variants
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it is happening. So, in
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I will
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To begin
with, there are a lot of adults who do not like shopping and do it only when they need it. They believe that shopping is wasting of
theire
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their
time.
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, maybe they do not have
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to
shopping
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at all , considering that they
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busy.
Moreover
, generally
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suggested that
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adults can wear the same pair of shoes for a long time and
decided
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to buy new
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after
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pair of shoes will destroy.
As a result
, they do not gain
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enjoyment
while
they do shopping.
Initially
, shopping was not entertainment.
In contrast
, after
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the era
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of prosperity began,
marketologist
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bracketologist
started to think about how to increase sales. Resultantly, they decided to create different activities inside
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big and small shopping malls. From that moment had been created various things for customer satisfaction .
For instance
, restaurants, small amusement zones for children, dissimilar activities zone etc.
Thus
, many individuals
prefer
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spend
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their
time somewhere in a shopping mall where a lot of things
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they can do.
In addition
, many
people
admire window shopping.
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they do not buy
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items
they just look at them and even enjoy
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.
As well as
,
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many
people
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about fashion and they esteem look catchy and stylish.
Therefore
, they
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shopping and adore to select different
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items
for
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their
outfits. In conclusion, there are a lot of factors in shopping malls which can help to enhance
people
's desire for shopping.
However
, there are
also
individuals who do not appreciate shopping. So, everything depends on personality.
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